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What do you plan to do in the future?
First of all, when i was young, I wanted to become rich and it didn't matter how.

But now I'm eighteen years old and I don't really know what I want to do. Since I was sixteen I have worked during my holidays to earn money.

I worked as a manual worker and it showed me the difficulties manual workers are faced with at work.

Now I'm still a student and, after my A-levels I would like to study biological and biochemical sciences at a Third-level college (called an IUT in France).

It's seems to be one of the best ways to study while keeping all options open

For the future I was thinking about studying or working in a foreign country because nowadays it seems difficult to find a job.

Also I like travelling, making some contacts abroad, and discovering new cultures. A little like " l'auberge espagniol" the movie.

I hope it will work for me…

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Ok, quite interesting but too many mistakes

Your mark is 12/20

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First of all when i was young I wanted to become rich and no matter the way.

But now I'm eighteen year old and I don't really know what to do, since my sixteen I work during my holiday to earn money.

I worked as a "blue colar" and it show my the difficulties met at work.

Then now I'm staying studie, after my "terminal" I would like to do an IUT to biological and biochemical analyses.

It's seems to be one of the beast way to studie without close me doors.

For the future I thought studie or work at foreign countries because nowaday it's seems difficult to found job.

Also I always like make trip, make some contact abroad, discover new cultures. A little like " l'auberge espagniol" the movie.

I hope it will work for me…

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In your opinion what is a real friend?

I just read a text about friendship in which the author deals with the fact that we can buy friends.
Then I started to ask myself what a real friend is ?
First of all, according to me, a friend is someone who shares your life and shares good times with you.
Now I can say that we can't know who your friend is until something happens to you.
Your friend will stay with you and try to help you, especially when it's about money or feelings.
Also I think a friend is not there to judge you, instead he/she should listen. For instance, when you just did something wrong, or when you are feeling bad..
To conclude, friendship is all about feelings and understanding, and we can't pay for that and it will never change. (120 words)

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In your opinion what is a real friend ? (120 words)

I just read a text about friendship, the author deals with the fact that we can buy friends.
Then I started to ask myself what is a real friend?
First of all according to me, a friend is someone who shares your life and shares good times with you.
Now I can say that we can't know who is your friend until something happens to you.
Your friend will stay with you, seeking and trying to help you, especially when it's about money or feelings.
Also i think a friend is not here for judging you, just listening. For instance, you just made something
wrong, or when you are feeling bad..
To conclude, friendship is all about feelings and understanding, and we can't pay for that and it will will never change.