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What are your plans for the future?

For a future, I think first of all that I should finish my studies to have a good background so that I can enter the world of work serenely without any obstacles standing in my way. I would like very much to work in a microbiological research laboratory in the future, so as to discover numerous microorganisms, bacteria and viruses. In order to do that, I hope to go to a third-level college (called an IUT in France) after I pass my A-levels to continue my studies. However, a lot of students want to get in on this course of studies and therefore it is difficult to get a place. So if I don't manage I'll do a Second-Year Post-A-level degree (called a BTS in France) which costs more and which only can be done in Nantes.
After my Third-level studies I shall envisage continuing on by going to an engineer's school which will mean 2 additional years on top of the 3 years I'll have already done, and so to have an engineering degree : a Masters Degree. While doing my studies I would like to really be able to continue with the rugby club and, who knows, maybe even finish at a high level. But it is important to complete your studies all at once to have a lots of opportunities in the future.

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Ok, very interesting but much too many mistakes

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What are your plans for the future?

For a future ideal, I think first of all of achieving my studies to have good foundations and so to come back into the world of works serenely with without any complications. I would like worked a lot in future in a microbiological research laboratory, so to discover numerous microorganisms, microbes and virus. For it after my B.A.C I envisage of going in I.U.T (university institute of technology) to follow my studies however one very asks for this course of study and therefore difficult of access. So if my file is insufficient to guide me I came to a BTS (higher technician certificate) that it costs more and is located in Nantes.
After my first studies superiors I shall envisage of continuing with engineer's school which will give me 2 additional years in the 3 years a past, and so to have an engineering degree has B.A.C +5. in parallel my studies I would like to really be able to continue the rugby club and why not at a high level. But it is important to achieve studies all at once to have a future already drawn.

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What is a real friend ?

For me friendship is a 2-way relationship . It is when you can confide in someone , talk to someone and have fun together and the feeling of friendship is mutual. Friendship is a real link between two people who share the same tastes , passion, hobbies, etc…
Friendship is strenghtened over time to share even more things with each other . Normally you never get bored when you're friends with the other person as there are always things to do, discussions to be had, or a hobby to be done together. Generally you have lots of fun with a friend because you have so much in common.
Finally, true friendship is one of the few things that can not be bought because the feeling comes naturally between two people, this feeling is to wear all that shy people have a little more difficult. (I can't understand what this last sentence means)
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What is a real friend ?

For me friendship is 2-way is when you can confide, talk to someone in and have fun and that feeling of friendship is reciprocal. Friendship is a real link between two people who share a taste, a passion, a hobby in commun.
Friendship is strenghtened over time to share even more things with her friend. In principle, you never get bored when you're friends with the other person as there are still occupations, discussions, or a hobby to ensemble. Generally lots of fun with a friend because the sense of mood is often the same.
Finally, true friendship is one of the few things that can not be bought because the feeling comes naturally between two people, this feeling is to wear all that shy people have a little more difficult.