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What do you plan to do in the future?
My plan for the near future is to have my baccalaureat (general certificate of education or A-levels) to continue my studies.
I would like to do a Second-Year Post-A-level diploma (A BTS in French : bioanalysis and controls) and then, probably, a professional degree if I need it.
Thereafter, and therefore in a distant future, I would like to find a job in a pharmaceutical laboratory or a laboratory for veterinary analysis .
I have not yet any fixed idea of the type of business/field I'd like to work in, but I will find that out later, I hope !
Finally, my real plan in life is to be able to provide for my family.
But winning the lottery would be a good alternative to all this …

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My plan for the (near) future is to have my baccalaureat (general certificate of education) for continue my studies.
I would like to make a BTS (bio analysis and control) and then, probably, a professional license if i have need this certificate.
Thereafter, and so in a distant future, i would like to find a job in pharmaceutical laboratory or laboratory for analysis veterinary.
I have not yet fixed idea of business that enjoy me, but i will find propably later, and i hope.
Finally, my real plan in life is to be able to provide for my family.
But winning the lottery would be a good alternative to all this …

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What do you plan to do in the future?

My plan for the near future is to have my baccalaureat A-levels to continue my studies.
I would like to do a Second-Year Post-A-level diploma (in French, it's called bioanalysis and controls) and then, probably, a professional degree if I need it.
Thereafter, and therefore in a distant future, I would like to find a job in a pharmaceutical laboratory or a laboratory for veterinary analysis .
I have not yet any fixed idea about the type of business/field I'd like to work in, but I will find that out later, I hope !
Finally, my real plan in life is to be able to provide for my family.

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This text is about unemployment in the European Union.
Eures is a scheme financed by the European Commision and it is a trans-national employment agency. This scheme is designed to help workers and employers. It offers companies a free noticeboard to advertise their needs from professional and executive staff to unskilled labourers.
Its Euro-adviser says that languages are of the utmost importance and form a formidable combination with marketing or finance.
The example of Spain is given in the text where nobody understands why you should speak Spanish since everyone speaks English.
So, Eures connot solve Europe's huge unemployment problem by itself but the scheme will hasten the day when Europeans will break out of their national boundaries into the next century.

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This text speak to unemployment in the European Union.
Eures is a scheme by the European Commision and is a trans-national employment agency. This scheme is designed to help workers ans employments. It offers companies a free noticeboard to advertise their needs from professional and executive staff to unskilled labourers.
It have an Euro-adviser who say that language are the umost importance and form a formidable combination with marketing or finance.
In parallel, it say of Spain who no understand why speak Spanish since everyone speaks English.
So, Eures connot solve Europes huge unemployment problem by itself. But the scheme hast the day when Europeans will break out of their national boundaries for the next century.


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For me, a true friend is a unique person and that person is rare : a wonderful person who will always be there when needed.
On the one hand, it's a person who does not judge you and appreciates you as you are.
A friend is there for you and listens to you with pleasure. It's a person to whom be can speak about our most hidden secrets.
Friendship is an exchange.
On the other hand, we take pleasure in listening to this friend and help him/her when needed.
Between real friends, we must have the same interests and we discussed interresting on both sides (I can't understand the last part of this sentence).
This true friend should be a lifetime friend, that's why we should always keep in touch with him/her and should see him/her regularly.
However, I myself have never believed that a true friend in life is essential.


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For me, a true friend is a unique person and it scarce. A wonderful person who will always be there when needed.
A person who does not judge you and appreciates you as you are.
A friend is there for you listening with pleasure. And we say our most hidden secrets.
Friendship is an exchange.
Conversely, we take pleasure in listening to his friend and help it when needed.
Between real friends, we must have the same interests and we discussed interresting on both sides.
This true friend should be a lifetime, that's why we keep contact with and want to see regularly.
Although I have never believed, a true friend in life is essential.