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Text 2 My plans for the future

After my high school diploma, I would like to be accepted in an engineering college (an 'IUT' in French), specializing in Food science because I find agronomy interesting. Indeed, I was at an Open Day and I got to meet some pupils in second year who convinced me I was rightto choose this option. I took into account as well the fact that there is a future in this field. In reality I haven’t got a clear idea of my future job but agronomy is really the sector I want to work in.
If I cannot go to an IUT, I plan to do a Second-Year Post-A-Level diploma in biotechnology because the curriculum is really similar to what I'm studying this year.

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After my high school diploma, I would like to be accepted in IUT option IAB because I find the agronomy is interesting. Indeed, I was in the opened doors and I have had feld of pupils of the second year which kicked away a certain envy for this option. I took into account as well the fact as there is some future in this domain. In reality I haven’t got a clear idea of my future job but the agronomy in the industry adorned me to be a good continuity.
If I cannot go IUT, I plan to go in BTS biotechnology because the program is really similar to that of the terminal STL.

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This article is about unemployment in the EU.
The rate of unemployment is very high in the UK, but a trans-national employment agency has launched a plan.
The goal of this scheme is to help workers and employers set-up an integrated labour market.
This scheme is important because Europeans will break out of their national boundaries and take advantage of the expanded opportunites of the next century.
The idea of EURES is good because the number of job vacancies has increased from 600 to 5 000.
People don't take advantage of their right to work and settle in other countries of the European Union.
But this poses a problem for UK applicants, since only 1/2 of them are fluent in another european language.
In reality, EURES cannot solve Europe's huge unemployment problem by itself but it's a good start !

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This article is about unemployment in the EU.
The problem of unemployment is very high in the UK, but an agency of trans-national employment launched a plan.
The goal of this scheme is to help workers and employers set-up an integrated labour market.
This scheme is important because Europeans will break out of their national boundaries into the expanded opportunites of the next century.
The idea of EURES was good because the number of job vacancies increase of 600 to 5 000.
People don't take advantage of their right to xork and settle in other countries of the European Union.
But this pose a problem: for UK applicants, since only 1/2 of them are fluent in an other european language.
In reality, EURES cannot solve Eurpoe's huge unemployment problem by itself.