Hadjar B's texts
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Corrected text :

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My plans for the future
Different people have different aims in life. Some aim at wealth, some at power, some at fame, some at business and some at education and knowledge. My aim is neither wealth nor fame. I wish to serve my country with the best of my talent, my ambition is to become a forensic specialist. Ever since I was little girl I have always enjoyed solving puzzles and invastigating crimes around the house or anywhere I was. I want to work with others with the view of improving or inventing something that is needed by the world. It will be my privilege to serve the people of my country by satisfying their requirements through this profession.

Comment :

I don't know where you found this text but it's not my idea of "a personal" text describing your plans for the future ! .

Your mark is 8/20

Original text :

Text 2

My ambition in life different people have different aims in life.Some aim at wealth,some at power,some at fame,some at business and some at education and knowledge.My aim is neither wealth nor fame.I wish to serve my country with best of my talent,my ambition of life is to become a forensic specialist,ever since i was little girl a have always enjoyed solving puzzles and invastigating crimes around the house or anywhere i was.I want to work with others view to improve or invent something that is needed by the world.It will be my privilege to serve people of my country for their reqhirement through this profession.

Corrected text :

Text 1

The title of the text is NEW PROVIDERS.
This text is about the story of a woman. Firstly, I will describe the picture: we can see that the lady in the picture is very well dressed because she is wearring a costume (a jacket, a skirt and a blouse). She seens to be very made up and her hair is curly, may be it's a perm.
She looks rather confused …maybe she has got so much to do, she can't do everything.
Now, about the text : this text explains the story of this woman, we learn about her life from when she graduated from University up until now, about how she met her husband and the problems she encountered all throughout her career and that of her husband. She talks about her career when she was made redundant and when her husband's business went bust.

Original text :

Text 1

text's names is NEW PROVIDER.
is texte is about the story of the women. firstely, the picture: we see she is very well dressed because she is wearring a costume(a jacket, a skirt and blouse). she seens to be very made up and her hair is curty, may be it's a perm.
she looks rather confused …may be she has got so much to do . she can't control everything.
now, the texte: this texte explain the story of this women, it's beguining for her comes at now. the meeting with her husband and her problemes with haved all long of this career and the career of her husband.she explain her career when she was vired and when her husban's busnesses