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What are your plans for the future?

In the future I shall want to be the president, to change things and to make sure that the power is not only in the hands of the government but really in the hands of the people whom I would represent. I shall make sure that every person who is a citizen of my country is treated with the same respect as me . I want to be the president because I like humanity, and I shall simply want to help the most deprived, to make sure that what every man thinks of the politics becomes thanks to me forgery (I can't understand this sentence), and that when I'm dead we can say Florent Taillefer was the president who did the best things when it came to unemployment & the economy & that he created a state which, compared to what it is today, would seem utopian….

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This question was not supposed to be treated as a joke !

Your mark (for your English) 4/20

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What are your plans for the future?

In the future I shall want to be a president, To make move things and make that the power is not only in the hands of a government but really to the people whom I would represent, I shall make so that every person being a member of my country are treated with the same respect as the one that we shall carry me .I want to be a president because I like the humanity, and I shall simply want to help the most deprived, to make that what every man thinks of the politics becomes thanks to me forgery, and that in my death we can say Florent Taillefer in was the president who made the best things on the redundancy and economic plan that he created a state who if he spoke about it today shall seem utopian….

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What are you plans for the future

In the future I shall work in a laboratory which is involved in the development and the production of plants because after this year I will do a Second-Year Post-A-levels diploma where every month I'll spend 2 weeks in school & the other 2 weeks getting on-the-job experience in a laboratory. But before getting on the course, it is necessary to find an employer, but I shouldn't have any problems finding a boss as I am motivated because it is really the job that I want to do. This system of 2 weeks in school & 2 weeks out would allow me to have a salary and to become more independent from a financial point and it would also allow me to the world of work. so that's why I have chosen to continue with my studies.

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Ok, but there were too many mistakes & too many modifications were necessary !

Your mark 7/20

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What are you plans for the future

In the future I shall work in a laboratory which will take care of the development and the production of plant for it after this year I will make a patent higher technician in alternation, what consists in being 2 weeks in learning in a laboratory and 2 current weeks, to make this patent higher technician it is necessary the tub and a boss to make his learning , me come hardly to begin has to look for my boss and I am motivate because it is really the job that wish to make the patent higher technician in alternation would allow me to have a salary each I and to become more autonomous on the financial point and especially of entry to the world of the rather fast work that's why I chose this pursuit of study .

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For me a real l friend is someone on whom I can count on and with whom I can share some good moments like at high school, at a party, in boarding school. A friend cannot be bought, one them chosen because he are cool and I like they (I can't understand what the last part of this sentence means!). You can confide in a real friend. With a real friend you can joke but when you are feeling bad he/she is there for you because he/she likes you . Your friend is usualy like you and the real friend built memory’s because your happening (// this part of the sentence has no meaning). The friend is always there for you. Your friend should not juge you because he/she must respect you . However the person you consider as your friend does not make quite these things it is that it is not one (I can't understand what the last part of this sentence means, sorry//).