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What are your plans for the future

After passing my A-levels in lab sciences, I hope to do a second-year post-A-level diploma in Diet & Nutrition. It is uncommon but I really want to do it.
I think having a balanced diet is the first gesture to being & staying healthy. A dietician can help people in the cases of under-nutrition, bad nutrition or being overweight, eating balanced and varied meals, etc... In addition, there are more and more people in need, because of fast food affecting people with diabetes who must monitor their diet together with those who are allergic to certain foods.
This project really interests me as I suffered from this problem in my childhood: food difficulties. I would be there for people who would be in the same position.

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Ok, interesting, but a little short with too many mistakes !

Your mark is 11/20

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After obtaining my baccalaureat STL BGB, I have the second-year post-A-level diploma diet. It is uncommon but highly requested.
I think having a balanced diet is the first gesture to gain from birth to be healthy. Dietician's help to people in under-nutrition, bad nutrition, or overweight, eat a balanced and varied meals. In addition there are more and more people in need, because of the fast food reaches people with diabetes who must monitor their diet. as those who are allergic to certain foods.
This project is close to my heart, I had to be in my childhood, food difficulties. I would be there for people who would be in the same case.

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In your opinion, what is a real friend?

A real Friend can't be bought . Friendship hasn't any **monetary value. A friend is there in good times and in bad times. There isn't any need to talk to understand each other , just one look is enough. Friends are plentiful but they don't stay around for long. While a true friend can be kept all our lives. A true friend knows when something is wrong even if you don't want to show it. He/she will always be there for you in any circumstances and that friend knows that you are ready to do the same for him/her. Friendship isn't a one-way link. It goes both ways. A friendship is built day by day and strengthened over time.

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Okay, some good ideas even if there are quite a lot of mistakes.

Your mark is 10/20

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In your opinion, what is a real friend :

A real Friend can't buy. Friendship hasn't value. A friend is there, in good times and in bad times. There isn't need to talk to understand, just one look is enough. Friends, we are full, but they doesn't stay long. While true friend, they can be kept all our lives. A true friend knows when it will not even if you don't want to show it. It will always be there for you in any circumstances and that friend knows that you read will do the same for him. Friendship isn't a one-way link. It goes both ways. A friendship is build day by day and strengthened over time.