Berengere P's texts
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What are your plans for the future
Later, I would like to become an astronaut. I love watching the sky with the stars and I would like to see this landscape more closely. I want fly through space in a rocket, see the Earth moving away and going round of the planets of our solar system. I would like to walk on the Moon as others have already done before me, see the cooling of the Sun and contemplate what forms the rings of Saturn. I would like to see all these things beyond a telescope or a documentary. I would like to hear the silence of the universe and cross the Milky Way.

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You mustn't confuse what you 'would like' to do and what you really 'want to' do ! This text is too short & doesn't answer the question.

Your mark (for your English) is 5/20

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What are you plans for the future ?

Later, I would like to become an astronaut. I love watching the sky with the stars and I would like see this landscape more closely. I want fly me through space in a rocket, see the Earth moving away and go round of the planets of our solar system. I would like to ask me and walk to the slows on the Moon as other have already done before me, see super cooling of the Sun and contemplate what form the rings of Saturn. I would like to see all these things beyond a telescope or a documentary. I would like to hear the silence of the universe and cross the Milky Way.

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What are your plans for the future
After my A-levels, I would like to do a Second-Year Post-A-levels Diploma in Medical Biological Analysis to become a lab technician. I don't even know in what high school but I'd like to do it not too far from Angers to stay fairly close to my family and my friends. I am really interested in medical biology and I like the hands-on experience we do in small groups in human biology in high school. If I am cut out to do these studies, I will do what I like doing in high school as the studies are quite similar to what I am doing right now. The programme we do to become a lab Technician is a continuation of what we have done in human biology, microbiology and biochemistry which is the study of cells, immunology, and the study of bacteria. There is one subject however that bothers me : animal experimentation. I like animals and therefore it will be difficult for me to work on them. This is why I am still thinking it over. However, if I don't pass my A-levels this year, I'll repeat my final year in Jean Moulin high school in order to continue on with my studies.

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Good, interesting but quite a lot of mistakes!

Your mark is 11/20

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After my bachelor's degree, I would like to make a medical biology Analyses Patent Higher Technician. I don't even know what high school but I'd like that is not too far from Angers to stay fairly close to my family and my friends. I am attracted by the medical biology and I like the TP we do in human biology in high school. If I am made in these studies, I follow what I like to do in high school and the studies consistent with what I do at this time. Materials submitted for the Patent Higher Technician are focused on what we do at this time during the course of human biology, microbiology and biochemistry which is the study of cells, immunology, and the study of bacteria. There is a single material that bothers me, which is the animal experimentation. I like animals and therefore it will be difficult for me to make of evil. This is why I still think about it. In a second case, if I couldn't have my degree this year, I did again a Terminal to the high school Jean Moulin in order to get there.

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A real friend is a person we meet one day and, without knowing why, we become attached to this person. This is someone with whom we share common points, with whom we feel good, with whom we have lots of fun. With a friend we like to share our opinions, emotions, passions. This is a person with whom we have in any case (I can't understand the meaning here) , at all hours of the day or night, it's someone we confide in. This person should not judge you, but he/she should help you overcome your worst problems. He/she will be there for you, to support you , to help you, to talk with you. With a friend we develop strong memories and emotions that we remembes when we are no longer together. This can be when we go out dancing, go to stores, or going for a ride on our bikes. This is someone with whom we become very attached and someone who becomes important in our life. We can tell him/her our problems, our joys, our expressions. He/she will listen to us and share our feelings.
A real friend is complicated to find, difficult to leave, and impossible to forget.

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A real friend is a person we meet one day, and without knowing why it attaches to this person. This is someone with whom it has common points, with which it is well, with that much fun. With which like to share its opinions, emotions, passions. This is a person who have in any case, at all hours of the day and night, who have may confide. Will not judge you by this person, but it will help you get out you of your worst problems. It will be there for you support, to help you, to talk with you. With a friend on created strong memories emotions that it remembers when lack us. Can be with out dancing, to stores, a ride. This is someone who was much attached and which becomes important in our life. Can tell him our problems, our joys, our sentences, he will listen to us and share.
A real friend is complicated to find, difficult to leave, and impossible to forget.